Friday, March 11, 2011

It's My Birthday Today - #fridayflash

The Big Three-Oh.
Am I having a party, you ask?
No party for moi.
I've found a new way to celebrate
this special milestone.
I'm going to prison.
For murder.

I'm afraid.
Sure I am.
When the fear gets too large I claw my thoughts back
To Zack.
To what we had.
What we shared before we did IT.

I wish he were here with me.
I would find strength and love in just one look from him.

But I've never been a logical person have I?
If Zack were with me
I wouldn't be in this fix.

He's the reason I'm going to prison.
They say I murdered him.
There's no such thing as 'mercy killing' in this state.

My 'mercy' has come back to sting me - hard.

The rest of my life will be a nightmare.

I'll have plenty of time
to think about what I've done.

But I'd do it all again.

For Zack.

Tell me what you think...


The Words Crafter said...

Ah!!!!! Fantastic hook; you can reel me in. I want to know what happened, why Zack had to be mercy killed, and what happens next!!!!

Love it :)

btw, my 'puter is working now *happy sigh*

L'Aussie said...

Thanks Becky. Glad u are all up and running again!


Eric J. Krause said...

Cool story! I wonder what really happened. Why did she kill him? Would be interesting to know. I'm sure it truly was a mercy her mind, anyway.

Deanna Schrayer said...

Wow Denise, this is Powerful! That's all I can think to say...

Steve Green said...

Creepy story Denise, the narrator sounds slightly unhinged, was Zack a zombie?

L'Aussie said...

Well I've got some of you thinking.

Donna Hole said...

Mystery, romance, tension . . this has it all Denise. Loved the tone and pacing.


L'Aussie said...

Donna: You're too kind.


Harry said...

Thirty is relatively young, so assuming Zack was anywhere near the same age, his "Mercy" killing could be debateable. I'm curious to know the rest of the story. Is she a saint or a loon? Interesting stuff so far!

Maria Papadopoulou said...

Tension and suspense...writing that evokes strong emotions. Well done!