Thursday, August 18, 2011

#RomanticFridayWriters #Fridayflash - The Prince and Princess of Darkness for the New Horizons challenge.

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My story today has been given new life from its first appearance as a twisted fairytale with a paranormal bent. I've cut it by half but hope I've still kept the edgy element.

The Prince and Princess of Darkness

‘Cindy, don’t go!’
‘I’m 18 years old! I’ll do what I want! I’m off to explore new horizons.’
Philomena and Persephone were thoroughly alarmed at Cindy’s outfit for the Prince of Darkness party – black, black and more black.
‘Cindy, this rave will be dangerous. There’ll be party drugs...’
‘What are you worried about girls? You’ve spent years working me like a slave while you had all the fun. Now it’s my turn to party. Nothing’s going to stop me now.’
Her stepsisters recoiled, horrified. Here was a stranger in silk and net, black beads, black stockings, black stilettos, black gloves…
‘What’ll we tell mother?’
‘Nothing. She’s always wanted me dead so there’ll be no problem.’
‘If you think I’m worried about your mother, forget it. My mum’s the only one I answer to.’
‘But your mum’s…’
‘Dead? You’d be surprised how helpful she can be.’
On the subway Cindy shrugged off the sniggering looks. She chatted to her mum. She’d visited her grave that afternoon. The little white dove that perched on the headstone had a note for her: ‘Come to the Prince of Darkness party! Best-dressed prize! A date with the Prince!’
When Cindy arrived the bouncers ushered her in like she was a foreign princess. She knew she looked amazing in her floaty black dress and sparkling black jewels.
The party was pumping when she entered the cave-like room. Everyone gazed at her, admiration on their faces. The Prince, who she saw leaning over the atrium, flew down the stairs and took her hand, leading her in the dance.
Cindy was puzzled. ‘Why, Prince, are you dancing with only me? There are many girls who are dying to dance. I see it in their eyes.’
‘Exactly, my princess. Their eyes are already dead, while yours blaze with light.’
‘Please not for much longer, my Prince.  I came for my date with Death.’
‘Is that what you want, my princess? To be with me forever after?’ He kissed her neck.
‘That is what I want my Prince. Mortal life has nothing for me.’
The Prince knelt before her, removing her stiletto with its razor-sharp heel.
She welcomed his steely embrace and his lingering kisses. She hardly felt it when he pierced her neck with her heel.
Smart Prince. So much easier than biting.
She swooned at his hot breath as he tasted her divine life source.


Word count 400. FCA.



li said...

Wow! A dark and slightly twisted take on the Cinderella story. Very stylish! *applause*

L'Aussie said...

Li, thank you!


W. J. Howard said...

A wonderfully romantic story that left me wanting more. Loved the touch with the white dove.

Eric J. Krause said...

Quite an interesting take on the Cinderella tale. I liked it! Loved the little details that absolutely made this story.

J.L. Campbell said...

Denise, this is my first taste of the dark side of your writing. I like it. Cindy has some attitude on her, which is understandable based on what she's going through. And boy was she ready to cross over. Being a coward and all, I still cringed at the neck piercing. Powerful last sentence.

J.L. Campbell said...

Oh, and yes, Cindy is definitely crossing into new horizons.

Daydreamertoo said...

The man who wrote cinderella would be proud of how you turned it into a modern day vampire tale.
Cinders has to get her man by hook or by crook! LOL
A fun read, thank you.

Anna said...

What a fun take on/nice twist to 'Cinderella'!! Puts me in a fairytale-mood!
Best wishes,
Anna's RFW No.15-'New Horizons: Cissi tells Selma...'

Ruth Madison said...

It continues to surprise and twist in unexpected directions. From the mother who wants her dead, to find out it's a step mother and her mother is dead, but her mother still communicates, but the biggest twist of all is the prince! Can definitely see the Cinderella story clearly, but definitely taken in a very dark way! I'd like to see this fleshed out more, which I guess is how it was originally!

Deanna Schrayer said...

You do dark quite well Denise! Great twist with the heel to make it that much more unique.

Francine Howarth said...

Ooooh. A blooded Cinders!

Nice twist on the original fairy tale. Gotta say I prefer teeth to that of stiletto heel! But perhaps he'd just had'em bleached and polished!! :o

Loved it. Loved the heavy-metal effect that came to mind whilst reading. ;)


Sarah Pearson said...

Oh now that was fun, you know, in a death n stuff kind of way :)

Laura said...

That was great - like reading it in pictures! Such a dark side to you... who knew?!

Beverly Diehl said...

Love the originality of this piece - not just the stiletto piercing, but Cinderella takes the subway. And the stepsisters trying to hold her back - to life.

L'Aussie said...

Glad I caught you all with my dark side. Remember it is a twisted tale, so the subway fits. And I had to think of something for the slipper!


Kiru Taye said...

Cinderella in black lace and the prince is a vampire. Ingenuous! It's definitely different.

Anonymous said...

What a thrilling piece! Sensitive and touching in some parts, and yes, romantic too! I'm glad I read this, very imaginative!

Steve Green said...

Deliciously dark take on the old fairytale.

Ms. Queenly said...

I kinda like her "forget you and forget you and your mother too" attitude and her boldness traveling to the party. I don't usually go with the rebellious teen attitude, even being young myself, but this seems like its coming from a positive place of self-determination and spirit or at least I like to hope so. Very nice twists, L'Aussie. Definitely something I would have read in high school when my mama didn't want me reading romance.

Ellie Great said...

Great story.

Charmaine Clancy said...

Quite a twist on this traditional fairytale!
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