tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post4100470523186117117..comments2023-06-25T20:28:32.344+10:00Comments on Flashquake - #Fridayflash and other flash fiction: #RomanticFridayWriters #FlashFriday #ff - Blue Moon Rising - 400 words of #ffDenise Covey http://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-1097242044477310712011-09-27T04:51:51.221+10:002011-09-27T04:51:51.221+10:00Very sensual. You allow the reader to participate ...Very sensual. You allow the reader to participate in the scene with all their senses.Scheherazadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08906467791904395295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-76462712778306163732011-09-26T22:21:13.332+10:002011-09-26T22:21:13.332+10:00The visuals you created here are glorious, Denise ...The visuals you created here are glorious, Denise - I felt every breath with Ruby. Like Francine, I would love to know more. The blue moon is expertly woven in too. Lovely!Margo Bensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06759845391358543223noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-15491884813898212422011-09-26T19:45:46.087+10:002011-09-26T19:45:46.087+10:00Denise,
There's something really enchanting ...Denise, <br /><br />There's something really enchanting about this piece. Maybe its the scene with the woman by the window on a moonlit night. <br /><br />Inspired!<br /><br />Cheers,<br />KiruKiru Tayehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03285263322486836620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-72140225177082555352011-09-26T07:46:44.498+10:002011-09-26T07:46:44.498+10:00One of your best descriptive passages - felt the h...One of your best descriptive passages - felt the heat, the annoyance, the restlessness and longing *fans self*Lihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08831231531918915804noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-47593210677093882102011-09-26T07:43:02.013+10:002011-09-26T07:43:02.013+10:00Stephen: And thank you so much for visiting/sharin...Stephen: And thank you so much for visiting/sharing your thoughts.<br /><br />Anna: I really enjoyed your story too. I would love to see the Northern Lights.<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-14281662218573683862011-09-25T23:26:34.635+10:002011-09-25T23:26:34.635+10:00Dear Denise,
This is so sad, but so beautifully re...Dear Denise,<br />This is so sad, but so beautifully rendered. Your text makes me feel for Ruby. I'm there with her. And yes, this is something that I have felt in real life too. <br /><br />One memorable and miserable night, when I had to walk home alone very late from a similar miscalculation, I saw the stormy, firey skies of the Northern Lights (<i>aurora borealis</i>). It was the first and only time I have seen this, and was more impressive than a simple blue moon! <br /><br />Thank you for your encouraging thoughts about my text. Now that I have read your snippet about Ruby and Michael, I think I understand better what you mean about letting the Blue Moon play a more important role in the story.<br /><br />I should have written a story with other characters rather than to half-heartedly press a blue moon into my 'Carl & the Faeri-people Part Two' - text. <br /><br />Best wishes,<br />Anna<br /><br />For the benefit of other readers:<br /><a href="http://annasadornments.blogspot.com/2011/09/blue-moon-romantic-friday-writers.html" rel="nofollow">Anna's REWers Challenge No 20 'Blue Moon'</a>Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-26501234001042235032011-09-25T14:11:14.074+10:002011-09-25T14:11:14.074+10:00How sad. I think I've been there a time or two...How sad. I think I've been there a time or two in my youth. Those were miserable nights. Thanks for sharing and connecting with this.Stephenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04753736809917062955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-14439168646718273332011-09-25T08:55:07.738+10:002011-09-25T08:55:07.738+10:00Steve: too true. DSteve: too true. DDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-62940172647543994512011-09-25T00:38:08.653+10:002011-09-25T00:38:08.653+10:00A touching story, let's hope her lover returns...A touching story, let's hope her lover returns, once in a blue moon is far too seldom.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-19956393345593032772011-09-24T19:54:56.169+10:002011-09-24T19:54:56.169+10:00Thanks for comments so far one and all.
Deidra: ...Thanks for comments so far one and all. <br /><br />Deidra: Thank you!<br /><br />Francine: All will be revealed!<br /><br />Deanna: High praise from you!<br /><br />Ruth: I love description, thanks.<br /><br />Beverly: Yes, I say FCA, code for Full Critique Acceptable. Thanks for suggestions. I struggle against passive language all the time.<br /><br />Sarah: Well, we'll see.<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-84282668605156381772011-09-24T02:41:41.333+10:002011-09-24T02:41:41.333+10:00Oh how sad, made worse by the fact that it seems s...Oh how sad, made worse by the fact that it seems she made a decision she's unhappy with.Sarah Tokeleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13273148070092101085noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-9648327588721297752011-09-24T01:18:13.930+10:002011-09-24T01:18:13.930+10:00I was very much THERE with Ruby; I've had thos...I was very much THERE with Ruby; I've had those sleepless nights, although without a blue moon to wish upon.<br /><br />You don't state what kind of feedback you'd like. One small suggestion is review your passive verbs like "was," "had," and see if you can substitute something stronger or in some cases you might eliminate them. Example: "rivulets of sweat ran between her breasts."<br /><br />I love her listening to the noises in the night.Beverly Diehlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00392288953821757887noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-21083791724637398632011-09-24T01:00:31.177+10:002011-09-24T01:00:31.177+10:00Gorgeous! It's so sensual and descriptive, I ...Gorgeous! It's so sensual and descriptive, I love all the visual language.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13195645967378589211noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-42049066623852754522011-09-23T22:39:15.380+10:002011-09-23T22:39:15.380+10:00Wow Denise, I can SEE the blue! This is so poignan...Wow Denise, I can SEE the blue! This is so poignantly beautiful, just grand!Deanna Schrayerhttp://theothersideofdeanna.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-13440981107957844462011-09-23T18:15:04.181+10:002011-09-23T18:15:04.181+10:00Hi,
Yet another snip of my fav L'Aussie roman...Hi,<br /><br />Yet another snip of my fav L'Aussie romantics. But oh no. They've broken up: why? I gotta know. What happened? I hate being left hanging... ;)<br /><br />best<br />FFrancine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-88134685708355834592011-09-23T17:15:34.314+10:002011-09-23T17:15:34.314+10:00You have a fabulous blog! I’m an author and illust...You have a fabulous blog! I’m an author and illustrator and I made some awards to give to fellow bloggers whose sites I enjoy. I want to award you with the Best of Romance Blog Award. There are no pass along requirements. This is just to reward you for all the hard work you do!<br /><br />Go to <a href="http://astorybookworld.blogspot.com/p/awards.html" rel="nofollow">http://astorybookworld.blogspot.com/p/awards.html</a> and pick up your award.<br />~DeirdraDeirdra A. Edenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03913506387908022479noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-26749082801792732632011-09-23T14:47:52.043+10:002011-09-23T14:47:52.043+10:00Yes, John, one can hope and wish...DYes, John, one can hope and wish...DDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-81642983297305682932011-09-23T13:55:38.524+10:002011-09-23T13:55:38.524+10:00Very romantic in the realm of Fantasy, one can hop...Very romantic in the realm of Fantasy, one can hope that one can wish.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-36370874985533713442011-09-23T08:58:39.981+10:002011-09-23T08:58:39.981+10:00Sonia: Thank you. It is sad.
Adura: Thank you. Gl...Sonia: Thank you. It is sad.<br /><br />Adura: Thank you. Glad you liked the symbolish.<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-40183995586077437532011-09-23T08:53:41.391+10:002011-09-23T08:53:41.391+10:00Yes she can definitely wish. Stranger things have ...Yes she can definitely wish. Stranger things have come true:) Kind of sad but realistic. Love the way you weaved blue moon into the fabric of the story and you made it a (symbolic) romantic backdrop too.Adura Ojohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10787703060107491771noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6010711523810642179.post-90586897848884230012011-09-23T07:49:20.778+10:002011-09-23T07:49:20.778+10:00A sad story! Like how bring the blue moon into it....A sad story! Like how bring the blue moon into it. It's kind of romantic.Sonia Lalhttp://storytreasury.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.com